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My team mates did fairly well on the rough draft. The main problems included a lack of seven sources and grammatical/spelling errors. Everyone had similar information, which made the essays redundant. The reason for this is because we all used the same sources. However, there were a lot of things that I noticed about theirs that I should include in mine like the various types of satellites each system uses.

In my own essay, I noticed that I should provide more details -- as noted by one of my team members. I also lacked sources and had some problems with in-text citation. One thing I forgot to attach to my essay was a reference page, which is a major no-no. I was also short in the word count. I didn't have too much to say so the paper was very weak. There were no major strengths other than the basic information I got from the sources provided on Blackboard. However, I believe that with a little revision my paper will be good as new.

I am planning on adding a lot more information, especially about the complexity of satellite radio. I noticed that I was lacking in this area in the essay, so I researched some more sites that helped me out with this portion. I will also make sure my reference page is completed before I even start revising the paper. As for the grammatical errors, they were minor and I couldn't believe I overlooked them but I'm planning on fixing them.

Overall, I did pretty bad on the rough draft but I expect to do a lot better on the final version. ( 287)